Victor and I enjoyed the lovely waters, woods, and mountains on our first walk as husband and wife. It was around when the wind suddenly grew stronger and a heavy rain storm fell from the sky. The storm intensified my worries for Victor. I had observed his agitation for some time now in silence. I could tell he was not fully enjoying the evening. It seemed as though Victor felt something was following us. He was cautious and watchful throughout our walk. I observed in Victor’s glance a terror. I was almost afraid to ask him about his fear. My voice trembled as I asked my husband what it was that he was afraid of. His words were, “This night is dreadful, very dreadful.” It was then requested by Victor that I retire from our walk. I left him and went into my room to retire for the night. I was only in my room for a short moment when I heard a noise behind me. It didn’t sound like Victor, so I was hesitant to look behind me. On the ground I saw a shadow. Its shape was much bigger than that of Victor. I turned my head around slowly to lay eyes upon the ugliest thing ever to be created. I let out a shrill and dreadful scream. The monster rushed to me and laid its hands on my neck…
Nancy: You captured Elizabeth's last hours magnificently! You had a lot of imagery that gave a clear picture of what was going on. I also really liked that "..." at the end.
ReplyDeleteGood job! :)